“Of course Tilly would be interested in the earl’s tailored wool coat with his spotless waistcoat and carefully tied neck cloth. The men who normally visited here wore ill-fitting garments which were often stained with food. Not only that, but the earl had a clean-shaven face and the hair of his head was trimmed into a neat style that allowed his strong bones to be seen easily. Seen and admired, she thought.”
I think this little snippet of description not only tells us what Tobias looks like, but how overwhelmed Tilly is and, indeed, how Mariah, too, is succumbing.
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You provided great examples of your style, and I know from reading you also put in enough detail to establish the period, both physically and ethically, without overwhelming the reader.
Hui Rhobin, thank you. I did see your lovely review of Courting the Countess and I hope I used the right e-mail address to say how much I appreciated your taking the time – and the content. anne
Excellent examples of how to set the scene and make the reader feel like they are there without beating them over the head with long passages of descriptive narrative. Action packed and keeping the reader fully invested.
Hullo Skye, thank you. I do love to keep things moving. Maybe down to all the drama I wrote. anne
“I don’t need to know what colour the paintwork is. Unless, of course, that’s relevant to the plot.”
Hi Bob, thanks for dropping by – especially as you agree with me! anne
Yeah, the paint isn’t that all important unless it is. Usually, it’s not. I’m not sure why, as authors, many of us like to include that. I try to give enough description so they can visualize it without it becoming overbearing.
Hi Marci, thanks for dropping in. Visualize without becoming overbearing is a good way of putting it. anne
Anne, very good points. It gets a little tedious when a writer loads and loads on the detail when it will never be mentioned again or hold any importance.
Hi Rachael, thanks for dropping by. There did seem to be a lot of agreement among us on this topic. Anne